ext_19715 ([identity profile] fanofsuper.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] mikeyrhcp 2008-04-23 12:01 am (UTC)

Great story & you did such a good job of showing Jared's emotions

With all due respect to you & your wonderful beta, I did find 1 line that is in error & in no way am I trying to offend

"Jensen can barley breath before Jared's mouth is on his" should be can barely breathe before....

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