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2008-04-23 12:01 am (UTC)
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Great story & you did such a good job of showing Jared's emotions
With all due respect to you & your wonderful beta, I did find 1 line that is in error & in no way am I trying to offend
"Jensen can barley breath before Jared's mouth is on his" should be can barely breathe before....
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With all due respect to you & your wonderful beta, I did find 1 line that is in error & in no way am I trying to offend
"Jensen can barley breath before Jared's mouth is on his" should be can barely breathe before....